Tuesday, March 27, 2018

Waking up

We are learning to right a descriptive piece of writing about waking up in the morning and we had to write ideas down and this is my piece of writing hope you like it.

Sunshine sneaks through my curtains  and then the darkness fades away but it is still a little bit dark  in my bedroom.I feel so relaxed my body looks like a ball. Then I see my dog on me and he is licking my face and it feels like someone is splashing me.There are pots and pans banging and I whispered to myself ” is dad making breakfast”? Also I think  dad is stoking the fire. I’m talking to my dog and said is it Saturday? But of course he didn’t answer because he is a dog. I tried to go back to sleep and I rolled to far and almost fell out of bed. I am feeling so scared. The birds are chirping I felt like I was in wonderland.Then I through my blankets off and I was as energetic as a cheetah. By Autumn

1 comment:

  1. Hi Autumn, I really like your descriptive writing it sounds me on a school morning when I don't want to get out of bed. Maybe next time you could make your writing smaller so it doesn't take up so much room. I have a alarm clock to wake me up so I am not late for school because my Mum starts screaming and I have to start getting ready for school.


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